The second part of the story

[Snoop Doug]

Chapter Two is complete and online. I wonder, if you read the story and if you have the time, could you please give me some feedback? Does the style work? Too long? Too short? Good, bad, funny, sad?? Here's the start of chapter two with the link to the conclusion:

After a good night’s sleep under the stars, SB and Sir Engagealot enjoyed a simple breakfast of mouse on toast. “Well then, mumbled Engagealot as he flossed his teeth with the mouse’s tail, “Tell me about your time leading change at Beyondworld Tellings, and what it was that you felt you missed?”

SB gathered her thoughts. “In the early days, things went swimmingly. Important senior people attended meetings, made important senior noises, and said that important senior stuff would happen.” “I like it” said Engagealot, “You got a bunch of senior managers in BT (everyone referred to Beyondworld Tellings by its initials) to agree all that. Impressive.” He shuffled forward, keen to hear more. “Well yes, it does all sound rather good” said SB “But that’s part of the trouble you see, it was all speak, no action."

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